It Has Begun

Author : White Knight

Date sent : February 13, 2013

Rating : G (Everyone)

Category : Other

Description : A two stallions and two mares were destined to meet, what they didnt know was it would change their lives forever

Length : Short -

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It Has Begun
By White Knight

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April 04, 2013
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do not BUMP characters/imaes/drawings/fanfics, it's only spam.

April 02, 2013
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March 25, 2013
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It's sweet, but it needs work before I would call it great. More sensory detail - sight, sound, smell, touch, and taste - would do it good, as would a more believable depiction of horse behavior; stallions are very territorial, especially when it comes to protecting their mares. The herbs and such also seem a bit off.

The detail with them going to a human village for help really threw me off. Overlooking the question of wild horses doing something like that, or for that matter of how they moved her - which could be an epic chapter or two all by itself - there is the fact that if Yin were going to die of blood loss it would take a lot less than a few days. Presumably she would have begun to recover by that time, or else died.

March 05, 2013
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Fanfic Bump ^^

March 02, 2013
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Wow this is amazing I love it so much! Cant wait for the second part!

February 21, 2013
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It is sad, but it gets better and worse in the second half ?

February 20, 2013
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I love it , poor Freddom .

February 18, 2013
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Thanks guys, im so glad you like ^^

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February 18, 2013
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This is awesome Jack! I LOVE it! I'll try and get the second part done soon 83

February 18, 2013
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i like it! can't fo0r the rest :D




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