Melting up Chapter 1 Scarred

Author : Falinelover101

Date sent : March 23, 2013

Rating : PG (Parental guidance suggested)

Category : Epic

Description : A new fawn appears who is lucky go happy all the time. She seems to make friends with them. Meanwhile, Bambi's mother is going to get enslaved by scratch. Faline gets scarred to life When the unusual creature, a caribou named Sedna, appears. Then Athena is out on the meadow and gets two bloody scars.

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Melting up Chapter 1 Scarred
By Falinelover101

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July 17, 2013
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Wow. Really good, I like it, awesome work. :P

March 23, 2013
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It's pretty darn good. You might wanna watch to make sure you get all the punctuation in, but other than that and a few other moments, it's pretty great! I loved the vocabulary use - particularly grotesque. Now, the moment with Ronno and Faline taunting Sedna, though - there's something there. When Ronno first said something, I had trouble telling whether he was being genuine or goading Faline on. You'll certainly want to make note in the story next time when someone's using sarcasm or taunting. But all in all, really good! ^^ Now, I'm going to render on Aspen since I have an idea of what she's like.

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March 23, 2013
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March 23, 2013
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Yes! It is finally done! It is a little better written then the prologe. I hope you like it:)


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