Wow. Really good, I like it, awesome work.

It's pretty darn good. You might wanna watch to make sure you get all the punctuation in, but other than that and a few other moments, it's pretty great! I loved the vocabulary use - particularly grotesque. Now, the moment with Ronno and Faline taunting Sedna, though - there's something there. When Ronno first said something, I had trouble telling whether he was being genuine or goading Faline on. You'll certainly want to make note in the story next time when someone's using sarcasm or taunting. But all in all, really good! ^^ Now, I'm going to render on Aspen since I have an idea of what she's like.

Yes! It is finally done! It is a little better written then the prologe. I hope you like it