This topic is on the wrong board. It belongs on the
General Private Roleplaying board.
I understand that maybe the two of you are new, but you should know that all rp posts must be over one line long. You can find the rest of the rules
here. You may also find that these two topics can help with your rping, so give them a read:
Official Roleplay Guides and
Rose's Roleplaying Guide.
All roleplays, even private ones, should have a plot and character bios on the first page. The links above will help you create those. They will also help you learn how to lengthen your posts using description instead of just dialogue along with creating characters that will really help create a better story. I good example can be found
here.Also, you both need to work a bit on your punctuation. For example, this:
Punk_Head wrote:
,,Yup , me too ,, said Ranni and shook her fur.,,see ya around,, she said and walked in the opposite direction sniffing the ground searching for the creature's scent
should be written like this:
Quote:
"Yup, me too," Ranni said and shook her fur. "See ya around," she said and walked in the opposite direction, sniffing the ground and searching for the creature's scent.
and this:
blackcat wrote:
Bella calmed then she smilled. ,,You know what? You're awesome.,,.She looked around her then she said. ,,Enough with talking ...I have mission here.,,-then she stood up and took her knife.
should be written like this:
Quote:
Bella calmed down, then she smiled. "You know what? You're awesome." She looked around her, then she said, "Enough with the talking. I have a mission here." Then she stood up and took out her knife.
