Untaken Path - Ch 16: Thunder Builds

Author : Feathervenom

Date sent : December 25, 2012

Rating : PG (Parental guidance suggested)

Category : Epic

Description : Trar has overtaken a very pacifistic herd, and resolves to turn them into fighters... whether they want to, or not. Meanwhile, Skander makes an unholy decision and with the warning of a mouse, the real preparations for war begin...

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Untaken Path - Ch 16: Thunder Builds
By Feathervenom

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December 30, 2012
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lol X"DD

December 30, 2012
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Lolz, there's a trope for that. XD What Happened to the Mouse? Well, I suppose in at least my closing I'll tell you. She may show up before then, depends on if the situations supports it. Don't wanna tack in a character 'cause I wanna say "HEY LOOK IT'S CHARACTER X!" :b Anyway, glad you enjoyed! ^^

December 30, 2012
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Feather... WOOOOOOAH! *Flails* That was so EPIC! Yay Huckleberrys back and better than ever ;D MLW did catch on about my comment X"DD Oops lol I cant wait to read the next chapter, its getting so tense..

I wonder what happend to Yew... Never really thought abotu where she disapeared too lol

December 28, 2012
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Rebumpin'

December 27, 2012
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HAH you had to explain Kaiser's lineage to a non-fan XD I find that amusing indeed. There's always the eagle in Spirit to trace, I suppose, and I was THINKING he'd be red-tailed, but I'd have to check what hawks live in the area Bambi takes place in. Anyway, no, Trar's not overly complex... he's just... Trar. He wants power and he wants does. Pride, avarice, lust... Geez, and Nacht suffers from Wrath, avarice, envy, lust, gluttony, AND pride. Everything except slothfulness! ...Well, maybe not pride, so much.

Oh, Trar's antlers? He probably fought some buck when they were in velvet at some point. I never did explain that... when a buck's antlers are in velvet, they are bendy, and that's why Campion can't fight - Trar must have ignored that idea and gotten in a fight/defended himself while in the summer, and they got all torn up. Usually nontypical antlers occur when a buck bumps into something with them, but hey... this isn't exactly real life. :b

December 27, 2012
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I would adopt the hawk, but honestly, I can't draw hawks. At all. (I COULD of course search for a lineart or coloring page, but...meh.)
I honestly love to make doodles of them in school. They're usually very cute. ^^ (But I once had to explain to a friend why Kaiser is the son of a brain-damaged mass murderer. She hasn't even read your fanfic, but Nacht is already her favorite char. XD)
Trar...well, I hate him, especially for killing my favorite Bambi character, but he isn't the most interesting or complex character in your fanfic, I have to admit that. But it's kinda like with Eric. Eric is nice and believes in true love. Trar is evil and believes in...well, using does to get strong offspring.
By the way, you never told us why Trar looks the way he looks. I would like to know that.

December 27, 2012
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I'm glad to write Noir in. ^^ I'm excited especially to write in the romance between her and Kaiser. :D They're such a cute couple! I don't have it now, but I'd sketched out a picture of her with him and it was very cute. X3 Anyway, yes, I can garantee I'll enjoy writing in the fate of Trar. I mean, I can't bring myself to hate a character I devised, but if YOU honestly hate him, can't stand him, and can't wait to see him die, I've done my job right.

..That is, of course, if you don't hate him for being generic and bland. o.o He isn't, is he? I need to know if he is. XD Anyway, yeah, I'm probably going to start the next chapter soon - I just don't know what to do with the hawk. I plan to keep him as an informant for Bambi, but he needs an owner. :b And name. And personality. Heck, if no one takes him, I'm keeping my hawk!

December 27, 2012
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New chapter! Yay! :D
Huckleberry's back! Yay! I suspected him to come back judging by what Hige was saying, but that was really nice of Death and Life. ^^
And yay, Noir! I'm pleased to see her in this, really.^^
And Trar...terrible as always. -.- I mean, I hate the things Nacht does far more than the ones Trar does, but honestly, I hope both of them get what they deserve.
Yay, Skander finally knows what his dad is like!
Well, battle's just about to begin...I'm anixious to see...read...what's going to happen.


December 27, 2012
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CHAPTER 16 FINISHED! *Throws a party* Ummm, so yeah, the mouse turned into a hawk. He needs adopted!

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